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A countdown. A message. A threat |
I woke up at 5:42 a.m. with my heart pounding so hard it felt like someone had knocked on my chest.
The room was dark blue, lit by early
morning light.
For a few seconds, I didn’t move.
I just stared at the window.
Because the dream still
felt alive.
It started so normally.
I was returning home from somewhere nearby. My colony was literally a five-minute walk away. I could already see the electric poles near our lane.
But for some reason.. I boarded a bus.
I still remember that feeling from the dream, the strange awareness that something was wrong, even though everything looked ordinary.
The bus was nearly empty.
A mother sleeping against the window.
An older man chewing paan.
Four men are sitting together near the
back.
And one kid.
Maybe ten years old.
He sat alone.
Barefoot.
School uniform covered in dust.
At first, he looked scared.
Then he smiled.
Not like a child.
Like someone pretending to be one.
The bus stopped near a roadside tea stall after my stop. I remember feeling irritated.
“Why didn’t I get down earlier?” I asked myself.
That’s when the kid stood up.
He pulled out a knife..
No shouting.
No warning.
Just movement.
Fast.
Wet.
Silent.
By the time people understood what was happening, four men were already dead.
Their throats..
I still remember the sound more than the blood.
The bus driver tried to run.
The boy looked at him.
And suddenly the driver froze.
Like his body had stopped listening to him.
That’s when the world changed.
Not slowly.
Instantly.
The sky outside became pale grey.
The buildings looked stretched..
Electric wires moved like veins under
the air.
The road no longer felt like Earth.
It felt controlled.
Like something huge was watching from above.
The boy stepped off the bus.
And everyone followed him.
Not willingly.
Like puppets.
I observed..
I don’t know how long.
The roads kept changing. Streets folded into places I had never seen. Shops had no names. Dogs stood still like statues.
Then I met them.
Two people..
A man around thirty.
A girl may be my age.
Both terrified.
Both exhausted.
And both carrying the same thing I had.
A message.
No explanation.
Just those words burned into our phones.
The man told me they had been tracking “the activity.”
Every night, strange black patterns spread slowly across the ground near the bus stop, like cracks growing under invisible glass.
And every day..
No news reports.
No police cases.
Nothing.
As if the world itself was hiding it.
“We tried leaving,” the girl said.
“It follows.”
“Who?” I asked.
Neither of them answered.
Because deep down..
We already knew.
It wasn’t human.
Days passed.
Then months.
The three of us stayed in contact secretly. Never speaking on calls. Never message directly. Always changing locations.
But no matter where we went..
We would see signs.
A child staring too long.
A stranger smiling at us in a crowd.
Footsteps behind us in empty streets.
Like something was learning us.
Studying us.
Counting down.
Day 97.
Cracks began appearing in the ground in our colony..
Day 103.
Birds stopped sitting on electric wires.
Day 111.
Everyone in the colony suddenly received money.
Exactly 10 crore rupees.
No source.
No bank history.
Just transferred.
People celebrated..
Bought gold. Cars. Phones.
But we knew the truth.
“If you use the money,” the man whispered, “they’ll find you faster.”
“How?” I asked.
He looked at me with dead eyes.
“Because it isn’t money.”
That night, I saw my neighbor counting cash in his room.
At 2:14 a.m., all the lights in his house switched off..
At once.
Then came the screaming.
By morning..
The house was empty.
No blood.
No bodies.
Just wet footprints
leading upward across the ceiling.
We decided to leave the city before sunset.
No phones.
No ATM cards.
No vehicles.
Just walk..
Disappear.
We reached the highway outside town while the sky turned orange.
For the first time in months..
It felt peaceful.
Then, every phone around us began ringing at once.
Hundreds of them.
Inside houses.
Inside pockets.
Inside moving cars.
One sound.
One vibration.
The girl slowly checked her dead phone.
The screen was ON.
A message appeared.
WE FOUND YOU
The road beneath us started cracking.
Not breaking.
Opening..
Like something underneath was breathing.
The man began crying.
The girl couldn’t move.
And then..
We saw it.
Above the clouds.
Something enormous is shifting behind the sky itself.
Not flying.
Watching.
Waiting.
Coming closer.
The last thing I remember from the dream,
It was a child’s voice.
The same boy from the bus.
Softly saying:
“You were never escaping.
5:42 a.m.
Sweating.
Breathing hard.
I looked around my room to make sure everything was normal.
The fan.
The wall clock.
The window.
Then I walked to the window and looked outside.
For one second..
I imagined a meteor falling from the sky.
And right then..
A white contrail appeared across the morning clouds.
Long.
Sharp.
Silent.
I stood frozen.
Then slowly took out my phone..
and clicked a picture.
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| After the dream, it didn't feel normal anymore |


Your writing is so immersive. The short, punchy sentences during the action scenes made my heart race and the slower, descriptive parts pulled me deeper into the mystery. It’s rare to find a story that balances horror and poetry so well.
ReplyDeleteThe star of the story remains symbolism through out... especially the part where the child on the bus doesn't feel like an actual child and someone pretending to be one... absolutely stellar writing... would 10/10 reread ✨️
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ReplyDeleteDude, this was insane! I read it at night, and now I’m scared to look out my window. That bus scene… ugh, so unsettling. And the countdown? Genius. More please.
This story stuck with me all day. The way you described the world changing, everything seemed controlled, was so eerie. What inspired this? Also, that ending… is there a part 2?
ReplyDeleteThe ending with the contrail was perfect.👌
ReplyDeleteBrilliant work. Still thinking about that ending.
ReplyDeleteMasterful cosmic horror.
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ReplyDeleteI don’t usually read horror, but this pulled me in. The fear felt so real, like I was there with them. The way you built the tension was incredible. Thank you for this, Sir.
Wow, this story gave me goosebumps.
ReplyDeleteI’m still not over that ending.
ReplyDeleteSir, That kid on the bus was so creepy. The part with the money and the empty house gave me chills.
ReplyDeleteJust super interesting.
ReplyDeleteThe kind of story that makes you think after. Read it, you'll see what I mean.
I'm reading this at 2 AM. Why am I doing this to myself? But I couldn’t stop. The part with the money gave me actual chills. 😱
ReplyDeleteBahut hi interesting laga. Thoda darr bhi laga but in a good way. Writing style accha hai.👍
ReplyDeleteWho knew nightmares could be so artsy? You nailed it.
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